A date at McDonalds.
Ben likes a girl in his class, her name is Sheila. The problem is that Sheila does not like Ben, Sheila likes Daniel. Daniel is Bens twin brother and Daniel does not like Sheila. Daniel wanted to help his brother so he asked Sheila if she would like to come to McDonalds and she said yes! Daniel and Ben made a plan to trick Sheila. Ben tricked Sheila so she thougt that Ben was Daniel. They met on McDonalds and talked about what they where going to eat. Ben decided to eat a tripple chees and Sheila decided to eat chicken nuggets. Daniel was standing outside and looked on them when they where eating. Then Sheila stopped to eat and just looked on Ben in a minute, then she said: you didnt have so nice teeth before, you are not Daniel!!! I never want to see you and Daniel again bastards!!!
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